CantaloupeLifestyle@lemmy.world to politics @lemmy.worldEnglish · 1 year agoSecret Service agents protecting Biden’s granddaughter open fire when 3 people try to break into SUVapnews.comexternal-linkmessage-square205fedilinkarrow-up1608arrow-down137
arrow-up1571arrow-down1external-linkSecret Service agents protecting Biden’s granddaughter open fire when 3 people try to break into SUVapnews.comCantaloupeLifestyle@lemmy.world to politics @lemmy.worldEnglish · 1 year agomessage-square205fedilink
minus-squareEl Barto@lemmy.worldlinkfedilinkarrow-up5arrow-down1·1 year agoHow would you have written it?
minus-squareNotMyOldRedditName@lemmy.worldlinkfedilinkarrow-up14arrow-down10·1 year agoNot OP Secret Service agents protecting Biden’s granddaughter open fire when 3 people pick the wrong SUV to streal.
minus-squareMaggoty@lemmy.worldlinkfedilinkarrow-up14arrow-down1·1 year agoSecret Service Fires Shots at Car Thieves But we don’t do non sensationalist headlines anymore.
minus-squareEl Barto@lemmy.worldlinkfedilinkarrow-up10arrow-down7·1 year agoYou just made me realize that the original headline doesn’t specify that the SUV is where the granddaughter is. You also make that mistake. I think we can do better. Let’s see: Secret Service open fire at thieves who unknowingly attempted to break into SUV carrying Biden’s granddaughter. And I still think we can do better, but right now I’m le tired.
minus-squareBlaidd@lemm.eelinkfedilinkEnglisharrow-up10arrow-down1·edit-21 year agoThe vehicle was empty, it wasn’t carrying anyone.
minus-squareEl Barto@lemmy.worldlinkfedilinkarrow-up2·1 year agoAh, serves me right for not reading TFA. In that case I would have simply written what @Maggoty@lemmy.world wrote in this very thread.
minus-squareafraid_of_zombies@lemmy.worldlinkfedilinkarrow-up4arrow-down1·1 year agoThat implies that there was a right SUV to steal.
How would you have written it?
Not OP
Secret Service agents protecting Biden’s granddaughter open fire when 3 people pick the wrong SUV to streal.
Secret Service Fires Shots at Car Thieves
But we don’t do non sensationalist headlines anymore.
You just made me realize that the original headline doesn’t specify that the SUV is where the granddaughter is. You also make that mistake.
I think we can do better. Let’s see:
Secret Service open fire at thieves who unknowingly attempted to break into SUV carrying Biden’s granddaughter.
And I still think we can do better, but right now I’m le tired.
The vehicle was empty, it wasn’t carrying anyone.
Ah, serves me right for not reading TFA.
In that case I would have simply written what @Maggoty@lemmy.world wrote in this very thread.
That implies that there was a right SUV to steal.