problematic shit aside, his writing just feels like he has no filter telling him whether a sentence is necessary or not. like he will first hint at something then immediately clarify it plainly. or he will “show, not tell. then tell anyway” about a character, something that was already mentioned in dialogue.
"Hapton Home, Maine, population 320. Only a few families still live here, ever since that fateful day. Yep, it’s a small town alright. And a terrible thing happened here. Bobby Bingus still remembers that day in the 50s when he came home from school to see his mother at the house where he and his mother lived.
“Hi mom! Sure is nice to be a young boomer in the 50s. Feels like only good things will come to me and my friends, young kids the same age as me, ya know.” said Bobby, hopeful about life and feeling young and full of life, even though things might not go the way he hoped.
problematic shit aside, his writing just feels like he has no filter telling him whether a sentence is necessary or not. like he will first hint at something then immediately clarify it plainly. or he will “show, not tell. then tell anyway” about a character, something that was already mentioned in dialogue.
"Hapton Home, Maine, population 320. Only a few families still live here, ever since that fateful day. Yep, it’s a small town alright. And a terrible thing happened here. Bobby Bingus still remembers that day in the 50s when he came home from school to see his mother at the house where he and his mother lived.
“Hi mom! Sure is nice to be a young boomer in the 50s. Feels like only good things will come to me and my friends, young kids the same age as me, ya know.” said Bobby, hopeful about life and feeling young and full of life, even though things might not go the way he hoped.
"
" said his mom.