I think some of the other commenters pointing out that it reads as a command is probably a big one, but you did a pretty good job of explaining it here (imo). Even just saying to him that you want a heads up of if it’s good or bad and working out a system so you don’t stress would probably be a marked improvement for you, and I would bet it’d be an easy fix.
I honestly think the 60s special effects are one of my favorite aspects about TOS. They’re silly and corny and the suspension of disbelief is nonexistent but it wouldn’t be the same without them. That, and also the dramatic lighting in the closeups and the extravagant eye makeup on literally everyone lol.