• InevitableSwing [none/use name]@hexbear.netOP
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    2 days ago

    Sentence after sentence - you have to wade through massive information overload and way too many clauses. Its’ clause city. It’s a serious slog to figure who is doing what and why are they doing it. The first easy fixes would be if the editor had them use far more periods and if the order of things was changed so you know where the text is going. What a mess.